Goth / Alternative Rock / Fusion
I enjoyed your composition and performance very much. This song to be very pleasant with a mood that...
more I enjoyed your composition and performance very much. This song to be very pleasant with a mood that went well with your theme and your mellow voice works very well with the style, genre and mood as well.
I would like to extend some constructive criticism that may help you to take the song even further, although it was definitely well done.
Watch out that your voice is not competing against an instrument that has similar timbre. (for example, around this phrase ‘I realize your hesitation..’) This happens early in your song and the accompaniment should support and blend with the voice not overshadow it. Your voice is delightful, I found myself wanting to hear it more. Once in a while the sound is a little pushed…perhaps relaxing your jaw and just trusting your sound. .. This is the usual cause (along with neck tension or head posture) but you may take some time and try to notice where the tension is coming from. Using a variety of vocal dynamics and variations in tone especially with the chorus or repetitive phrases can be very effective to create more emotion with your vocals.
There were some spotty moments were the listener hears breaks in the flow of sound. This may be due to recording technology issues.
I like the positive message about someone willing to keep trying in the relationship; not giving up.
The overall form of your composition was balanced. Your song had a very nice guitar solo with an excellent placement in the arrangement to make it interesting. Rests and changes in arrangements are as important and melody and harmony, the effective creation of tension to release of tension, whether in lyrics, voice or accompaniment. Nicely done!