Its all over the place  I like the way it starts then you lose me where you stop the beat. I think you should have kept the beat going throught that part because it took you off course and off beat completely. I understand that you are wanting to mix up the dynamics in the song but when you do that you have to be sure to to stay on beat especially of you decide to drop the beat for an extended amount of time. I think you were trying to put in more words than the actual space of the beat would allow. That is fine just be sure to not lose your audience trying to mix it up. The song is dope though and I love the hook but I'm wondering if the hook matches what you are rapping about. On some levels it does but in some areas it isn't so the song sounds disengenuine like you started it off singing about one thing but rapped about something else entirely bit only in some parts of the song. Most of it is on point because I still can grasp the meaning. This has good mixing and mastering and the song's sound quality is excellent. I can tell it was worked on vehemently and you all did a great job constructing it! Love it!