Like the song but you asked for ideas for the lyrics based on the title I only heard 2 colours in your song greay and black think I would have been feeling blue seeing red , red wine ,white canvas green hills far away , yellow sun goes down miss your brown eyes ... I still like the song as it is it has a nice feel though sad message all the best

O.K., Jeff..I Don,t find 'Any Fat'..in This Song...Production is Well Done, but..If You Are The Jeff Harris, that I Here on Reverbnation, from Florida, The Track Needs Fating up, in the mix..ie. EQ. & Raising the vocal track over the bk vocals, in places. (Even if you are not the same guy,..O.K....Its a Good Song as Is, but could use a better mix, & Master....There is nothing wrong with the song, or Production.----Good Work.

So I decided to do your review today. I listened to your song a few times and let it roll around in my head. I like the concept of the song. The lyrics are nice as I love alliteration and the changes in the song are nice. So the things that I think could be improved on. The lead vocal should be stronger. I understand with the smokey, raspy voice what you are going for. My suggestion is to double track the vocal and pan each track hard left and hard right. That will give your voice a little more presence without changing the vocal coloring. I love the backing vocals they are in the right spot and just loud enough. The only other thing I would say is the song is a little long if you are looking at radio airplay. I would trim it down. I get the change and the little snare march with the banjo but some of it seems a little unnecessary. It almost seemed to me like you wanted to see how many different instruments you could put into the song. As I heard a few piano chords but only in one section and then a banjo. I think it's awesome to have different instruments in songs but if you are just going to have them in small sections of the song it kinda seems a little unnecessary and you are trying to showcase talent within the song without thinking about content. Those are just my opinions and if I was producing the song these are things I would try and get you to do but ultimately the song is your vision and if you felt for your vision needed those things I wouldn't fight you over them. In general the song is solid and I like it. Only a little stronger lead vocal presence is all that would be necessary to make the song pop. I love the lyrics and the concept. It's a great song with a little polish would be something spectacular.

In the great tradition of country. A rare voice with a scratchy feel and nice slide guitars.The feel of great hymn for the working class that needs another kind of voice that gives a kind of hurting guy opening their arms for you. listen carefully. The only down side is the lo fi kind of feel on the recording, knowing hat a good mix would make a great diference. So the only possibility is to go up on the charts.

One of the things I enjoy most about Number One Music artists is the newfound ability to hear music from around the world by singers who I'd never have the chance to listen to otherwise. That, in itself, is a great thing. Here, with this song we get a throwback to early 80's country from a music standpoint. Vocally, the production, mixing and mastering are off and do not help the song.

Absolutely love the vibe of this song! Before you go directly to the chopping block, lyrically, or otherwise, ask yourself: What are my intentions for this piece? If you will be self-performing on stage in front of your fans, sing it how you feel it, and how it will best connect with them. If you are shopping it elsewhere, label or publishing co., you might need to play more by their rules. If you still look to make some cuts after, drop me a line. Perhaps I can offer suggestions. Hope this helps.

Really liked the guitar lines. Smooth and clear. Music is good, would like to hear more from you soon. keep up with the good work and keep your dreams working. Keep it up with what you are doing.

I truly like this. Possible lyrics. Strange things can happen in the black mess of the night. In my mind, I hear this as an additional background to what you have. Repeating off your assisting background. Tell what you think. FYI, normally I wouldn't offer lyrics. But you Are so close. Good luck. Thanks Magic

This will be a nice Country Song but some Work must me done in Arrangement ..also if You make It a little shorter app 3.5 min ( Main Radio Stations in General do not like songs longer )..I do not know haw Music Publishers will react but I hope that You know ..You have just 10 sec to catch Theirs Ear..or They will NOT listen..I like Your Song but Important Is if They will LOVE It..( not like..They MUST Love It)..so try to make a better version of It and after that send It to Them..I wish You good Luck with submissions..

Classic Country sound from the start and a real sweet pedal steel lead open this heart baring confession. A nice powerful chorus, that I was able to sing along with by round 2. Smooth harmony compliment the story. Unexpected change at the bridge that caught me by surprise but it worked. There is a marching drum breakdown that also kept the song interesting and added depth to the track. Overall a nice tune, don't change a thing!

Buenas tardes desde Jerez de la Frontera compañero! Qué puedo decir de tu tema para mejorarlo? Comienza con una guitarra intro muy bien ejecutada, tiene melodías vocales buenas, arreglos de guitarras buenos, una voz que me encanta, unos coros perfectos, unos cambios armónicos muy bien estructurados y un estribillo pegadizo... yo creo poco habría que añadirle o quitarle a este tema... lo único que se me ocurre es que podría incluir un buen sólo de guitarra al estilo de Mark Knophler, le vendría como anillo al dedo. Por mi parte no me queda más que felicitarte por esta cimposición y desearye toda la suerte del mundo. Un saludo!!!!

OK FIRST THINGS FIRST JEFF TRY TO RELOAD YOUR SONG WITH MORE VOLUME LEVEL YOU HAVE HEAPS MORE HEADROOM AVAILABLE I THINK LYRICALLY THERE IS NOT MUCH MORE YOU COULD DO WITH A SONG LIKE THIS WHICH IS A COUNTRY BALLAD AT HEART THERE ARE ALL THE GOOD PRODUCTION TECHNIQUES YOU HAVE EMPLOYED NICE COUNTRY SLIDE GUITAR THERE IS GOOD LIGHT AND SHADE BETWEEN CHORUSES AND VERSES KEEP AT IT

Let me say thanks for asking my opinion. You asked about lyrics, I dont know man, personally, I think the lyrics are OK, maybe dont need the bridge, or change just the first 2 lines. When you record, make sure that its recorded HOT. My speakers are all the way up and its still pretty low. The band sounds good and I like the arrangement except for the 2 lines I mentioned on the bridge. Your voice has a rasp to it , which is different ( good). I would say bring it up more in the mix. Thanks and keep doing what you're doing

The song is a good composition, do not cut anything, in my opinion if the song was born like that, so you should leave it as it is. on some occasion, I tried to do the same and I never found what I wanted, in the end I left it as at the beginning. Greetings friend and colleague.