Oh gosh...where do I begin? Pardon my "constructive criticism" but I have alot to say here. First...I "love" the Rhythm Guitar feel in this and the MELODY is very moving! {Unfortunately that's the "best part" of this review.} As a songwriter myself who from time-to-time has had {due to lack of other resources} had to do my own thing to make a demo. And the sad part of that is it can take a "good lyric" {which your's is} and "musically" make a wreck of the song! My "best guess" is that you are doing all of this BY YOURSELF. Right? Well, "Vocally"...you need a better singer! Your voice is "not convincing"! Very pitchy in several spots. Sounds like you are more-or-less just trying to "get through this" rather than SELLING the song with your voice! This tends to make the vocal a bit "boring" early on. "Musically"...Rhythm guitar, bass, drums are "together". But very UNFORTUNATELY...the "lead guitar" {if standing alone would be KILLER!} But in this mix makes it sound like you and your best friend just had an argument, and he's playing lead guitar and doing his best to "WALK ALL OVER YOU" while you try to sing this song! It's as if to suggest that instead of a "complimenting" musical blending, that this is more of a COMPETITION between the lead guitar and the SINGER! {Like guitar wars!} It's like the new guy in the band who's EGO makes him "show off" but in the process DESTROYS the whole song! And the "fuzzy distortion" on that guitar just DON'T FIT with the rest of the song. Had "you/he" played that lead CLEAN...it might have been alot more "acceptable"!? If you were to tone down the lead some...kill the distortion; refine the riffs; omit the overkill; find a better singer; and re-record this in a REAL STUDIO with quallity production staff...This might be a WINNER! Keep on rockin. Southern New Mexico/USA

I love the way it comes in smooth and quiet. I love the way the music is uplifting and bright. it does seem like things are lagging. Then when the vocals come out they dont connect. They seem like it needs to be mix a bit more. The vocals needs a bit more color and passion. I like the electric guitar in this with the constent drum mood. It seems as you went along the music caught up together. It sounds like your performing live during the recording. So i not sure if you are or not. i love that that guitar. at the end where the instruments go it alone. good song just needs better mixing

Nice song.The first thing I noticed is the lead s seem over powering in the turnarounds. Listen to Carlos Santana to get an idea of how to use them. And maybe a little to much Distortion for the song. The sound needs to be Balanced between the instruments, but keep the Vocals out front. I like some of the Leads some not so much. Drums sound a little dry. It's still a good song.

I think you are creative and a good songwriter. The mix is not bad, the drums are a bit bland, not a drummer rather a programmable metronome. I think the instrumentation has a good mix but the licks are a bit dissonant relative to chordal progressions. It is not my kind of song but I think it has potential for you to redo and make better.

Song defiantly has potential. Seems to be a diamond in the rough though. To start the timing of the instruments are a bit off and if they were tightened up it would give it a much better feel. The drum track needs to be replaced with something that is more believable. By not having a believable drum track it draws me to listen to the drums and not the song. I feel with a little bit the song can be real good. Fix a few things and it should have a much more Pro feel to it. Good Job!!!