Folk Rock / Country Rock
Let me start by saying that I review material from the prospective of commercial viability.... ... more Hi,
Let me start by saying that I review material from the prospective of commercial viability.... can you place the material with an established artist... Coming from the other side of the coin... with you as the artist.. you either like it or you don't.
The melody is well designed and pleasant to listen to... nice job... The chord changes fit together and take the listener to different places.... Instrumentation was well thought out and makes sense...
Due to the back and forth travel travel and the use of different recording set-ups... the overall sound of the track lacks clarity and punch. Also the lead vocal feels a little buried to me.....
The lyrics (prosody) feels right.. but the content of the lyrics feels underdeveloped to me (thrown away on some lines)... If it were me, I would look into better word choices in order to express the content of the song. It's a difficult subject matter and a rewrite in my opinion would help to improve the song and at the same time offer you the opportunity to record a new, cleaner version.
Over all a nice job. Keep Writing!